J. Wilder

I think I disagree with Griffinkeeper about the use of slang without explaining it. Tons of science fiction novels do that. It's the future, so obviously they're not going to ...

i don't know if this is the right category to put this in It is the right category. I like the beginning because I think it's usually good to start ...

hekategirl said: My mom won't let me read 'Go Ask Alice' she says its do old for me *GRRRRR* But it looks so cool! I can't wait to read it ...

I really like this so far!! I like the action beginning, the setting description is good, and the characters seem interesting. It jumps around, which gives me the feeling this ...

The title seems...Corny. Cliched. Something. I don't know, it's probably just my opinion; maybe lots of people like it. After all, Randy said it caught his eye. I really like ...

Jason then pulled a chipped bone from his pocket and with a hunting knife, he began to carve a name. What is he carving the name into? You don’t know ...

He had stopped shivering long ago. This sentence is in past tense, whereas the rest is in present. Personally I think you should put the whole thing in past tense, ...

I like it so far. It's kind of funny. You might want to say what Jason and Marie look like, though--and maybe show more about Rocky and Thomas look like ...

I started a critique on this on Thursday but when I tried to send it the computer messed up and it didn't work. Hopefully it will this time. I like ...